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Some people say that we do not need printed newspaper any more. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#people #newspaper
In the modern
world
, the number of people who abandoned
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paper based
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news
 and shifted to online
news
 through mobile or PC has rapidly increased.
As a result
, many citizens believe that there
is
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 no
needs
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need
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 anymore for
printed
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the printed
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newspaper
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newspapers
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. On
this
 account, I strongly agree with
this
 opinion and have a belief that before long, men and women in the
world
 will completely shift their
news
 source
to
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online.
This
 is based on the fact that newspaper is not good for the environment and
is
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it
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 has
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disadvantages
disadvantage
disadvantags
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disadvantages
 due to
its
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 inflexibility and slowness to
up to date
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 information. I will discuss these in
this
 essay. The
first
 demerit of paper-based
news
 is its damage to natural resources.
For example
, they use
significant
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 amount of
papers
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paper
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 made from trees and after one day, the papers become wastes
at
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 homes and offices.
In addition
, for transporting the papers,
distributers
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 need to use cars and trains which emit CO2. Inc to print
news
 is
also
 bad for the environment. To sum up, the
end to end
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 newspaper journey is against
eco-friendly
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 society. The
second
 drawback of printed daily
news
 is its inflexibility.
For example
, in the case of online
news
, the reporters can easily update
status
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 of
news
 as soon as situations change,
however
, for
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paper based
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 media, they need
reprint
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, slow to catch up
the
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 speed of the
world
.
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Web based
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news
are
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 much valuable to show
such
 things as stock prices, the weather, and reports of
sport
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 games. As
such
,
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paper based
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 media is not up to date with the current
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ever-changing
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ever changing
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world
 situation. In conclusion, I believe paper-based
news
 is a thing of the past and we do not need it anymore. it is bad for the environment and
slow
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 to give us information. luckily, we have a better vehicle to get higher quality
news
 more quickly, namely
internet
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the internet
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.
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