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Band 5.5

Itis important for people to take risks. Do you think advantages outweigh risks

Life
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 has no taste without
risks
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. It's essential for many to take risky decisions either in their careers or in their private lives.
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, Some
people
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 believe that taking
risks
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 may have negative effects on lives, Others think that
risks
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' advantages always outweigh their unwanted results, I opine with the latter view.
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People
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 usually face situations of different sorts in their daily
life
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 which forces them to take
risks
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. Those may be in their profession, As to take responsibility for an unguaranteed process
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 or facilitate a number of complex steps which should be followed.
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, They may totally leave their profession and shift their career. Moving on to personal lives,
People
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 may take a
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 by leaving their hometown, following an old dream or escaping from surrounding danger.
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, The youth migrating nowadays to different continents surfing for a better
life
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.
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, Parents may take huge
risks
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 to defend their kids.
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, Some
people
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 prefer riskless
life
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, as they believe that
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 is always accompanied by stress. They admire having a more stable one with fewer problems. Many believe that with no
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 you will achieve zero progress. I agree with them, as sometimes a new challenge or a great decision has to be taken without overthinking the negative impact it may cause. An obvious example of that, Was the Saudi Arabian team coach of
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 week's match. As he followed the rule of great
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 brings great treasure. So he decided to play with attacking tactics
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 and gave instructions to his player to stay forward, which was so risky. But, It worked and they won.

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