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some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplaceI tidy. with everything organized and in the correct place what is your opinion about this

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I think it is im[portant to keep my
house
 and
workplace
 tidy and clean with all things managed and in the correct situation. Why is
this
? My home must be tidy to keep my family safe. If my home is tidy and electricity lines and toys and shoes and books are organized and in the correct place no one is going to fall over and
do
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damage their body. One day my friend
Mohosin
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Mohsin
 walked
in
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 his home to answer a person that come to his
house
 door. He looked at the door. He didn't look at the floor and he fall over one shoe and
then
 he went to the hospital to have his head sewen.
Furthermore
, If people arrive and my
house
 is
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untidy
nontidy
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untidy
,
then
 I can suffer
embarrassed
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. My family and my friends like to see my
house
 tidy and clean. I like to see my
house
 clean. My
workplace
 must be tidy so everything is organized. If my
workplace
 is organized I think I can do more
work
.I can do
this
work
 because all my time is for my
work
. Sometimes I go to
work
 and all my time I have to spend looking for my
work
. My desk is dirty and the paper is all over the top and my time is taken by looking for what I want to do and
I
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need to do.
This
 is so terrible and now I think it's important to keep my
workplace
 managed and all things in the correct situation.
Also
, If I need to find pens or pencils it is easy when organized. To conclude in a nutshell
keep
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house
 and
workplace
 tidy is a good thing because I can find my things, my
my
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family like it,
It
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and It
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 is safe.
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