52. You borrowed something from your friend a while ago, but it has been damaged somehow. Write a letter to him/her and say - Remind him/her what you borrowed. - Explain what happened to it. - Suggest what you are going to do about it.

Dear Safwan, I hope
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letter finds you in excellent health and best spirits. You remember,
last
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month you lent me your PS5
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for my nephew. Unfortunately, it got damaged and I am writing
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to apologize for it. It was very kind of you to lend me the
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in very first place. As you know, my sister is visiting me after a very long time, and both of her kids were born and brought up in the USA. They can’t survive without playing games on the PS5.
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evening, as they were having fun with the
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, suddenly a spark ignited from the
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and the whole house went dark. After restoring the electricity, I tried many times to switch it on but It won’t start. I sincerely apologize for damaging your
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. Please forgive me for
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.In solution, I already called customer care and they are sending their best technician to repair
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tonight. Rest assured, I am footing all the bills for getting it repaired. If they were not able to fix the device,
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I would love to buy you a new one or an upgraded version of the
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. I truly regret the inconvenience caused and look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours lovingly, Zenith

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language
Consider using more varied vocabulary to enhance the quality of your writing. For example, instead of 'damaged', you could use 'malfunctioned' or 'broke down'.
content
Try to add more background to the situation for clarity. Explaining a bit more about how the damage occurred could help the reader understand better.
structure
The structure of the letter is clear, with distinct paragraphs for each main point, making it easy to follow.
tone
You have a friendly tone throughout the letter, which suits the context of writing to a friend.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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