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Nowadays culture is much the same all around the world when compared to previous times. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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 days, equality in ability
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 increased drastically throughout the globe than in preceding times. I believe that
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 is a positive development on the earth and the reasons for my argument shall be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs.
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 with, cultural equality threw light on the field of business nowadays. To clarify, the trade platforms, which were not expanded
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 in distinct places, took advantage during recent days, as they have an equal view on different traditions.
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, the furniture brand Damro was facing a plethora of difficulties
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 their trade all over the world in the past years
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 they failed because of the non-identical art.
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, they have become the leading brand now in every corner of the globe.
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, the process of sharing knowledge has become effortless. To elaborate, at present it is very convenient and easy to transfer ideas about any tradition to people who are not a part of that civilization. To illustrate, yoga is an exercise that has been practised by a particular concourse of individuals in the past but nowadays, it is very common everywhere regardless of age, gender, or job position.
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, I reiterate that, the change in the view on experience,
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 as it is much the same all around the world when compared to previous times nowadays is a positive development, and
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, the local businesses got the opportunity to compete worldwide and the sharing of knowledge have become easier than past days.
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