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Demand for food is increasing globally.what are the problems faced by farmers.Give proper measures and causes

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this
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 cutting-edge era
food
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 is an essential part of society.
Growth
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 in population increases
day
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 after
day
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as well as
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, as well as demand of food,
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demand
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the demand
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of
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for
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food
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also
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 increases. that's why
,
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apply
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 it's a most
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debatable
debateable
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debatable
 topic that how to fulfil the requirements of
meal
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a meal
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.
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Also
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,Also
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 it's a great
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challenge
chalenge
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challenge
 for
farmers
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 to boost
up
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apply
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the productivity of
crops
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.
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 is the reason that they face
lot
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 of problems.
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 essay will discuss some potential measures and pivotal elements.
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 of all, as
population
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the population
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 boost up
day
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 by
day
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,
requirement
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the requirement
a requirement
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of
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for
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food
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also
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 raise. It's the obligation of every government to provide
advance
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advanced
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technology
tecnology
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technology
 to
farmers
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 for better
growth
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 of
crops
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.
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 in developed countries authorities take it seriously, that's why
their
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there
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 are
lot
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a lot
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 of rules and regulations in
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 aspect.
Their
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 are some punitive measures for those who grow dirty
food
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 and sell it in
market
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the market
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. That's why the
farmers
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 focused on better
growth
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 and quality
food
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.
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, in developing
countries
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,countries
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food
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 is
a
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the
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 main
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headache
headach
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headache
 for enormous individuals. Authorities cannot take it seriously,
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and that's
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 why
farmers
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have
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do have
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 not any type of
advance
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advanced
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technology
tecnology
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technology
 to boost
up
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apply
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in
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growth
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the growth
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 of
crops
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. They used old
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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 and eventually
food
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 is not grown
in
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of
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 dapper quality. Put it all together, it's
a
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the
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 responsibility of every citizen and government
also
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 that how they get improvement in
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growth
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the growth
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 of
crops
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,
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apply
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 so that every individual should mitigate
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appetite
apetite
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appetite
.

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