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In some countries more and more international travel is becoming cheaper and more countries are opening their doors to increase the number of tourists. Do the advantages of increasing tourism outweigh the disadvantage.

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Overall, I think there are more advantages to increasing tourism than its disadvantage. I would say the main advantage of accepting international
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 for a country is stimulating the local economy. From my experience, I believe the
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, especially those who visited holiday locations, tend to spend a lot of money there. Where spend their budget is not limited to
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hotels and
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tourist attractions but they pay for
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public transportation and local shops.
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 the local people live in their routine
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 where they go is limited, the
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 to move around more actively which contributes to the wide range and the wide area of the local economy. For poor
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 and
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 which have low credit in their currency, earning from foreign
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 is more crucial as they might need to earn foreign currency which is more stable and valuable for trading. Obviously, there are disadvantages of tourism,
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 as something called "overtourism", in which a country cannot handle a huge number of
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. I saw
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 situations in many popular tourist locations before COVID-19 kept people from going on a trip.
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, I personally summarise that increasing tourism has more advantages than its disadvantage. Considering the fact that the economy in many
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 has been frozen since the COVID-19 pandemic, I think the money brought by the
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 will make a good effect on the
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