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Scientists say that in the future humanity will speak the same language. Do you think the advantages will outweigh the disadvantages?

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Several types of languages are sources of barriers in humanity in different aspects. As human beings, communicating is a very fundamental thing where we can improve in various ways.
For example
 socially, economically and politically. Living in a highly technological society, our world has been converted into a global village. But ,
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 there is still
this
 barrier of languages. Some countries still are not willing to talk any other foreign
language
. The only
language
 used is the native one. For foreigners investing in
such
 countries are very difficult.
Firstly
,
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foreign businessmen need to hire a person to translate all conversations with the locals. It is not necessary that the translator communicates the right information. Very often businessmen are disappointed because
in
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 the end , the result is below their expectations. Another cause is the ràte for a translator is very costly and some information might be confidential, whereas people from different countries would be more at ease if they can communicate rather with the same
language
. Gradually with the introduction of various applications on the internet, people on a business trip or on a holiday voyage
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 managed to find a way to converse in a
language
 different to theirs. To conclude, it is quite impossible to have a global
language
. Some languages are aged
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thousands of years and still are being used. But there are various ways to overcome these barriers.
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