The internet has a bigger impact on people’s lives because it is more popular than television Do you agree or disagree?

Watching TV is not well-known as the
internet
, so it
is
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has a huge effect on people’s lives. In my opinion, I completely agree that using
internet
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more
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is more
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influential.
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essay will analyse that
internet
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the internet
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allows
to exchange
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information
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of information
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and does not require additional costs. The
internet
is a huge library for people, where it is possible to find any
information
. Thanks to
this
,
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a person
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person
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people
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can learn about new news, weather forecast,
traffic
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and traffic
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on roads being
on
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one place.
Moreover
, it
is give
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possibility
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the possibility
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to
collection
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, storage and transmission of
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valuable
valueable
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valuable
information
.
For example
, social networks help to reach messages to the recipient in
few
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seconds
with
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using emails and
get
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fast feedback. Nowadays with the development of
technologies
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technology
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, a lot of people
who
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use the
internet
. Unlike installing
TV
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the TV
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,
this
is less expensive, because it does not require the connection of additional cables.
Furthermore
, on the
Internet
a lot of possibilities to find a job that will be highly paid and bring pleasure.
For instance
, PR managers, whose job is in external communication of the company, person and earn about 350,000
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per month To conclude, the
Internet
helps to receive and exchange
information
, being in one place and
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through the
Internet
profession,
thus
having a huge and positive impact on a person's life.
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