The internet has a bigger impact on people’s lives because it is more popular than television Do you agree or disagree?

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has a huge effect on people’s lives. In my opinion, I completely agree that using

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and does not require additional costs. The

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is a huge library for people, where it is possible to find any

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can learn about new news, weather forecast,

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, social networks help to reach messages to the recipient in

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fast feedback. Nowadays with the development of

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is less expensive, because it does not require the connection of additional cables.

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a lot of possibilities to find a job that will be highly paid and bring pleasure.

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per month To conclude, the

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helps to receive and exchange

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through the

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having a huge and positive impact on a person's life.

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The internet has a bigger impact on people’s lives because it is more popular than television Do you agree or disagree?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Some people think the main purpose of school is to turn children into good citizens and workers, rather than to benefit them as individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many young people nowadays choose to remain unmarried. Why are people doing this? Is this a positive or negative development?

Some people get into debt by buying thing they do not need and cannot afford. What is the reason for this behaviour? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?

Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Most high level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 percent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. To what extent do you agree?