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More people today preferred to live alone in comparison to the past do you think it is a positive or negative development give your opinion and a relevant examples to support your view

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Nowadays,
people
 pursue more privacy, many
people
 move to another place to live alone in exchange for more personal space. The phenomenon of
people
 want to independence more than ever has aroused wide concerns among various circles, Divergent as
people
's views on
this
 issue in question may be, I believe that
this
 has more benefits than drawbacks. Regarding the negative side of living alone, probably the most significant drawback is that causing heavy expenditures
such
 as house rental fees, electricity fees and water fees. In Hong Kong, the apartment rental fee will consume half of your salary which will be a burden to your future plan.
For example
, assume your dream is to travel the world after you retire, and that requires a lot of money. Too much living cost will in turn reduce the efficiency of saving money.
As a result
, living alone will increase the expenditures which interrupt your dream come true. Despite the aforementioned disadvantages, I believe that living independently brings about more benefits.
Although
this
 will cause the cost of living is extremally increased, it encourages us to achieve more like having a better monetary return job.
In addition
, more personal living space means you can bring anyone or anything to your home without noticing others or being stopped.
For instance
, you want to pet a cat, but your mother is allergic to cats. Giving it up is your only option unless you moving out. With
this
 in mind, personal living space is essential to everyone who still living with family. Under
this
 line of thinking, there are undeniably drawbacks of moving out alone, but it is believed that there are more advantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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