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Some people think that use of social networking apps is very beneficial in today's world. some say that it put negative impacts on the society. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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Nowadays, having a variety of applications in our daily
life
, technology's penetration in our personal
life
 has been an inevitable trend, particularly social networks. Though some critics believe that its detrimental effects weigh on its possible benefits, I am aligned with some other optimistic social activists who think that so useful could be social networking tools that most of their possible negative consequences could be considered negligible. Social
apps
 critics believe that through the waste of people's time, exaggerated propaganda of influencers, and promotion of profligating lifestyles, social networks, like Instagram with more than 2 billion users,
first
 have reduced people's efficiency,
second
 had misled the audiences in their strategic decisions like political decisions in parliament elections, and
third
 had stimulated impulsive purchases
instead
 of the necessary ones. To explain more, in recent years, reportedly, some non-profit advocacy agencies have been established to advocate for
such
 beliefs.
For example
, they recently published a comprehensive report which highlights that over 71
percent
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 of users spend more than one-
third
 of their time on
apps
, while just 27
percent
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 of it goes for those with social network-related businesses or careers. There are some other examples like
manipulation
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the manipulation
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 of
US
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 presidential election by Facebook or any other statistics that show 67
percent
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 of social purchases are neither need-based nor useful for the buyers,
however
, other types of social activists believe social
apps
 have many for our
today
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 social
life
,regarding their advantageous aspects like forging social bonding between people, increasing inclusion among underdeveloped communities and democratizing the media . Being a tech-savvy social activist, with more than seven years of practical and theoretical background in the technology sector, I am an avid fan of the optimistic group. To conclude, neither I nor any other fair person could deny the major constructive impacts that networking
apps
, like Instagram, have brought to our
life
.
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