Women can do everything that men can and they even do it better. They also can do many things that men cannot. But it is a fact that their work is not appreciated as much as men’s, although they have to sacrifice a lot for their family and career… It is said: "A woman’s place is in the home." What do you think
In the current
this
era, women
are less traditional and are working in different sectors. About this
so-called opinion that women
should stay at home, I have a totally opposite opinion to that which I will illustrate in this
essay with real-life examples.
First
of all, as we see that
in all developed countries, Correct word choice
apply
women
are working at shoulders with crew
and give their considerable performance at any job. It does not matter if they are in an upper post or lower from law to kindergarten teacher and even when it comes to becoming prime minister, they never stay behind and are working better than contingent. They understand all the issues and keep on solving them. Add an article
the crew
a crew
For example
, if we take the exampleChange preposition
of
bangladesh
prime minister, she is a woman and it is in front of all of us how Bangladesh progressed in education, agriculture and textile leaving Pakistan and India behind during her time.
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Bangladesh
Secondly
, being a mother women
are more aware of a child’s behaviour. So, she can serve at the kindergarten level where she can tolerate kids’ mistakes whereas men find it difficult to tolerate and cope with child’s behaviour. For example
, there is a nursery school for children of 3-6 ages near our house where they are taken care of by two women
. The kid after returning home show
great patience for things that they used to cry for. They are treated in a controlled environment by two Change the verb form
shows
women
and I think children's behaviour, mental growth, and curiosity developed at a small age.
In conclusion, it is completely wrong to put women
at home rather than allowing them to serve according to their skills. Because in many jobs, women
out-stepped men and some jobs can only be done by women
. Men simply cannot do them without the help or presence of women
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite