In many countries today, people in cities either live alone or in small family units, rather than in large extended family groups. Is this a positive or negative trend?

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demographic changes lead to small family units or alone
people
instead
of nuclear or extended
families
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in cities. I believe that
this
trend
is both positive and negative. Economically, the
trend
of
lower
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population might be beneficial for governments and to some extent to individuals. If governments are coping with the distribution of limited resources, the
trend
of small
families
will positively
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on
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the economy of the country and solve
economics
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problems in some cases.
for example
,
this
trend
saves the country from food, energy and water shortage. Because if the resources are not proper for the
people
, the economic
situations
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will be worse for them
especially
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for extended
families
rather than the small or single one. In
such
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situation
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, Small
families
or alone
people
can manage better their budget in the economic predicament than large
families
. Psychologically and behaviorally, alone
people
, small
families
and countries could be
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effected
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affected
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in some cases. Nowadays, as lonely
people
in cities are more than
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the
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past, they don’t have a great network of
people
or extended family to share their problems and feelings with them,
they
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and they
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might suffer from depression and loneliness.
In addition
, in
aggressive
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situation
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,
such
people
may use too much alcohol or drugs for removing negative feelings. While if they had extended family, they could have shared problems with them.
Additionally
, In future,
this
demographic change may
brings
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the problem of labour shortage for
government
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the government
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, which can negatively
affects
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on
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their economy. Small
families
,
also
, may have
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a problem
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problem
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problems
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because
in
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extended
families
, other members of the family are responsible for caring
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children
children's
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for childrens
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childrens
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children
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after school. while in small
families
with busy parents, the children’s behaviour is
being
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affected by the television, friends and the internet. Especially, when
in
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the
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young
ages
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, children
cant
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distinguish
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between
write
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and wrong,
they
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and they
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may learn negative
behavior
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. In conclusion, the demographic change to
the
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small
families
or single
people
,
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is depend
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depends
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on the countries and their current and future situations and
people
.
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