In many countries today, people in cities either live alone or in small family units, rather than in large extended family groups. Is this a positive or negative trend?
Nowadays,
the
demographic changes lead to small family units or alone Correct article usage
apply
people
instead
of nuclear or extended families
especially
in cities. I believe that Add the comma(s)
,especially
this
trend
is both positive and negative.
Economically, the trend
of lower
population might be beneficial for governments and to some extent to individuals. If governments are coping with the distribution of limited resources, the Correct article usage
a lower
trend
of small families
will positively effects
Change the verb form
effect
on
the economy of the country and solve Change preposition
apply
economics
problems in some cases. Replace the word
economic
for example
, this
trend
saves the country from food, energy and water shortage. Because if the resources are not proper for the people
, the economic situations
will be worse for them Fix the agreement mistake
situation
especially
for extended Add the comma(s)
,especially
families
rather than the small or single one. In such
Correct article usage
a situation
situation
, Small Fix the agreement mistake
situations
families
or alone people
can manage better their budget in the economic predicament than large families
.
Psychologically and behaviorally, alone people
, small families
and countries could be Correct your spelling
affected
effected
in some cases. Nowadays, as lonely Correct your spelling
affected
people
in cities are more than Change preposition
in the
the
past, they don’t have a great network of Correct article usage
apply
people
or extended family to share their problems and feelings with them, they
might suffer from depression and loneliness. Correct word choice
and they
In addition
, in aggressive
Add an article
the aggressive
an aggressive
situation
, Fix the agreement mistake
situations
such
people
may use too much alcohol or drugs for removing negative feelings. While if they had extended family, they could have shared problems with them. Additionally
, In future, this
demographic change may brings
the problem of labour shortage for Change the verb form
bring
government
, which can negatively Correct article usage
the government
affects
Change the verb form
affect
on
their economy. Small Change preposition
apply
families
, also
, may have Add an article
a problem
problem
because Fix the agreement mistake
problems
in
extended Add the comma(s)
,in
families
, other members of the family are responsible for caring Correct your spelling
children
children's
Change preposition
for childrens
childrens
after school. while in small Correct your spelling
children
families
with busy parents, the children’s behaviour is being
affected by the television, friends and the internet. Especially, when Unnecessary verb
apply
in
Change preposition
at
the
young Correct article usage
a
ages
, children Fix the agreement mistake
age
cant
Correct your spelling
can't
distinguish
between Change the verb form
distinguishes
write
and wrong, Correct your spelling
right
they
may learn negative Correct word choice
and they
behavior
.
In conclusion, the demographic change to Change the spelling
behaviour
the
small Correct article usage
apply
families
or single people
,
Remove the comma
apply
is depend
on the countries and their current and future situations and Change the verb form
depends
people
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