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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.

#people #music #cultures #ages
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 era,
music
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in
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integral
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 part of human life.
People
listen
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music
 whatever they do or wherever they stay for getting enthusiasm as well as rejuvenate. Some
people
 believe that
music
 has magnetic components for knowing diversity,
culture
 and
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 together despite
of
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ages
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. Personally, I support
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disagree. To agree
with
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,
music
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 tells
the
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stories about a virtual fact, which never
rely
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 on a single
culture
.
For example
, when
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writers
writters
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writers
 note their songs they just go deep
to
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 their heart and disclose
their
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 exerts of mind. So it is just a language of human
being
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 not their only.
As a result
, folk who are musical
they
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listen
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this
 song and try to sing it as they think it
was
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insight
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their
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 mind.
Consequently
,
people
 are able to know the diversity,
culture
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about
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 the world
by
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music
.
Moreover
, there are so many live concerts
besides
 audio-visual
music
, and when
people
 go for live
music
 in spite of their multiple cast in different places
of
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 the globe
then
 it
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creates
creats
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creates
 a horizon for knowing themselves. To illustrate, a popular New York magazine shows that prominent singer Justin Bieber performed a live show in New York just two years back, where
a
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numerous number of different ages
people
 around two
millions
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 integrated from 190 countries, and they shared their views.
Hence
,
people
 can extend their knowledge by sharing cultures. To conclude, recently,
people
 are
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 different types of
music
 like
,
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 English, Spanish, Arabic and so on, and
this
 way they discover different cultures. I believe, it belongs
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a positive
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 impact on
culture
.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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