Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.

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era,

music

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part of human life.

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music

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whatever they do or wherever they stay for getting enthusiasm as well as rejuvenate. Some

people

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believe that

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has magnetic components for knowing diversity,

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together despite

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music

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stories about a virtual fact, which never

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on a single

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writers

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note their songs they just go deep

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exerts of mind. So it is just a language of human

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, folk who are musical

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song and try to sing it as they think it

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are able to know the diversity,

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music

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, there are so many live concerts

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audio-visual

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go for live

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in spite of their multiple cast in different places

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creates

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a horizon for knowing themselves. To illustrate, a popular New York magazine shows that prominent singer Justin Bieber performed a live show in New York just two years back, where

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numerous number of different ages

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integrated from 190 countries, and they shared their views.

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people

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can extend their knowledge by sharing cultures. To conclude, recently,

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different types of

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English, Spanish, Arabic and so on, and

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way they discover different cultures. I believe, it belongs

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impact on

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

264 words

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universal language
evoke
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diverse audiences
cultural exchange
generational gaps
shared experiences
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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Young adults are now choosing to wait until later in life, often until they are in their 30s, to settle down and get married. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Young people are leaving their homes in rural areas to work or study in cities. What are the reasons? Do the advantages of this development outweigh the drawbacks?

Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree?

You have just won two tickets to a concert and want to invite your friend to go with you. Write a letter to your friend. In the letter •give details about the concert •describe how you won the tickets •explain why you’ve chosen your friend to go with you.