Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individual and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree

In
this
modern era, it is considered that social
media
deeply influenced
society
. Some people argue that social sites and
apps
have negatively affected
society
as well as
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an individual
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individual
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individuals
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while
other
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others
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oppose
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.
However
, I completely disagree
this
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idea.
To begin
with,
this
is a technology era and a person who is not using
the
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social app is not able to compete with
society
. To be more precise,
as
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apply
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all the business and official deals are done via different
apps
. In fact,official meetings and transactions are
also
executed by using
a different online applications
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different online applications
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.
For instance
, in Pakistan at
school
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,school
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all the administrative work is managed and updated by using
Punjab
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the Punjab
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SIS application. Supervisors of the institute, have to connect to
internet
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the internet
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to get
latest
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the latest
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e-mails
by
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from
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higher authorities.
This
will not only reduce the cost of management but
also
made the transmission of orders faster than a manual system.
Hence
,keeping
such
advantages every field is launching its own
apps
to work efficiently.
On the other hand
, excessive
use
of anything is bad for health.
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Over
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use
of social
media
has made people
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addicted
addiction
addictor
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addicted
.
Public
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is more
introverts
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due to
extra
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the extra
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use
of mobile phones and
latest
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the latest
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technology.
In addition
to it,
human
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the human
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does not like to spend leisure time with each other.Rather than spending their time
in
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playing online games and making videos on Tiktok, people should enjoy
company
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of their fellows. To exemplify, a large number of users died every year due to selfies fever by accidents. To elucidate more, for the sake of popularity on social
media
young generation is doing some unethical activities, which do not
suite
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suit
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a civilized
society
.
This
trend should be banned and there should be moderate
use
of social
media
. In conclusion, it is needless to say social
media
is part of our lives. Advancement of technology has made our lives much easier and cheaper than earlier and
launching
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the launching
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of new
apps
is
also
thriving which is
official
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beneficial for us. Meanwhile, extra
use
of social
media
is
also
having
bad
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a bad
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effect
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affect
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effect
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on
society
, which should be minimized to some level.
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