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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individual and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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In
this
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 modern era, it is considered that social
media
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 deeply influenced
society
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. Some people argue that social sites and
apps
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 have negatively affected
society
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 as well as
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an individual
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individual
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individuals
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 while
other
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others
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oppose
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.
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, I completely disagree
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this
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 idea.
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 with,
this
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 is a technology era and a person who is not using
the
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apply
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social app is not able to compete with
society
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. To be more precise,
as
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apply
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 all the business and official deals are done via different
apps
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. In fact,official meetings and transactions are
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 executed by using
a different online applications
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different online applications
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.
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, in Pakistan at
school
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,school
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 all the administrative work is managed and updated by using
Punjab
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the Punjab
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 SIS application. Supervisors of the institute, have to connect to
internet
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the internet
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 to get
latest
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the latest
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 e-mails
by
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 higher authorities.
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 will not only reduce the cost of management but
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 made the transmission of orders faster than a manual system.
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,keeping
such
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 advantages every field is launching its own
apps
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 to work efficiently.
On the other hand
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, excessive
use
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 of anything is bad for health.
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Over
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Overuse
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use
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 of social
media
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 has made people
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addicted
addiction
addictor
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addicted
.
Public
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The public
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 is more
introverts
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 due to
extra
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the extra
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use
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 of mobile phones and
latest
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the latest
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 technology.
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 to it,
human
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the human
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 does not like to spend leisure time with each other.Rather than spending their time
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playing online games and making videos on Tiktok, people should enjoy
company
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the company
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 of their fellows. To exemplify, a large number of users died every year due to selfies fever by accidents. To elucidate more, for the sake of popularity on social
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 young generation is doing some unethical activities, which do not
suite
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suit
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 a civilized
society
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.
This
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 trend should be banned and there should be moderate
use
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 of social
media
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. In conclusion, it is needless to say social
media
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 is part of our lives. Advancement of technology has made our lives much easier and cheaper than earlier and
launching
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the launching
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 of new
apps
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 is
also
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 thriving which is
official
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 beneficial for us. Meanwhile, extra
use
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 of social
media
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 is
also
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 having
bad
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a bad
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effect
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affect
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effect
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 on
society
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, which should be minimized to some level.
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