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Some people think that the only way to relax is rest or sleep, while others say people need to do exercise or sport to relax. Discuss both view points and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays
people
work
 around the clock;
as a result
 , they become tired by the end of the
day
 . Some
people
 believe that taking a rest and having a sound sleep is the best
way
 to relax our body and mind , others opine that doing some exercise and playing sports is a better
way
 . In my
opinion
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 I completely agree with the
second
 view , and I will discuss both sides in the forthcoming paragraphs .
To begin
 with , taking a nap in the middle of the
day
 is the best
way
 to have some rest and relax .
This
 is because the human body needs a break and sleeps at least 7 hours per
day
 to can focus and
work
 effectively .
For example
, there is a huge
difference
 between someone who sleeps 8 hours and another who just sleep for 4 hours ,and we can see the
difference
 in their life.
For instance
 , some researchers from Oxford University found that
people
 who used to take some rest and sleep for just 40 minutes after
work
 are more delighted and effective rather than whom they
work
 all
day
 and the result was without value and they tend to retire early
On the other hand
, doing exercise every
day
 and even just walking for one hour per
day
 make a
difference
 and helps to treat the mood to feel good .The reason behind
this
 is
people
 who play sports regularly
such
 as football and swimming are happier and they have the energy to
work
 entire the
day
 .
For example
 , spending one hour per
day
 doing some activity to move your body and your blood makes a huge
difference
 in our
way
 of thinking and makes life better,
hence
 we can appreciate what we have . In conclusion ,
although
 having a nap and meditation will help a lot to relax. The best
way
 to feel better is by doing regular exercise .
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