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Some people think that the only way to relax is rest or sleep, while others say people need to do exercise or sport to relax. Discuss both view points and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays
people
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work
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 around the clock;
as a result
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 , they become tired by the end of the
day
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 . Some
people
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 believe that taking a rest and having a sound sleep is the best
way
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 to relax our body and mind , others opine that doing some exercise and playing sports is a better
way
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 . In my
opinion
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 I completely agree with the
second
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 view , and I will discuss both sides in the forthcoming paragraphs .
To begin
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 with , taking a nap in the middle of the
day
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 is the best
way
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 to have some rest and relax .
This
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 is because the human body needs a break and sleeps at least 7 hours per
day
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 to can focus and
work
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 effectively .
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, there is a huge
difference
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 between someone who sleeps 8 hours and another who just sleep for 4 hours ,and we can see the
difference
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 in their life.
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 , some researchers from Oxford University found that
people
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 who used to take some rest and sleep for just 40 minutes after
work
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 are more delighted and effective rather than whom they
work
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 all
day
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 and the result was without value and they tend to retire early
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, doing exercise every
day
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 and even just walking for one hour per
day
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 make a
difference
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 and helps to treat the mood to feel good .The reason behind
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 is
people
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 who play sports regularly
such
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 as football and swimming are happier and they have the energy to
work
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 entire the
day
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 .
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 , spending one hour per
day
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 doing some activity to move your body and your blood makes a huge
difference
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 in our
way
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 of thinking and makes life better,
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 we can appreciate what we have . In conclusion ,
although
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 having a nap and meditation will help a lot to relax. The best
way
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 to feel better is by doing regular exercise .
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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