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Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema other says to be fully enjoyed films need to be seen in a cinema.

#people #films #phones #tablets #cinema
Few people say that watching a
movie
in
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 our
cell
 phones is
better
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a better
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experience
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 than going to a
theater
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 while others believe to
experience
 a
film
 completely one has to go to a
theater
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. In my opinion, I agree with the
second
 statement. In
this
essay
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 I'm going to explain both
the
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views. Convenience is one of the key benefits of seeing a
movie
in
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 a
cell
phone
 while coming to
cinema
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the cinema
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 hall atmosphere plays a huge role in involving and enjoying the cinema. Some people who are working overtime
does
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do
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 not have ample amount of
time
 to book tickets to the
movie
 and make a commute to the auditorium. So if they get
a
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some
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 leisure
time
, they use
this
time
 to watch a
film
in
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 their mobile phones by sacrificing some of the amenities provided by the
film
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theatre
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theater like
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theatre-like
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 huge
screen
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screens
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,
background
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and background
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 noise. sound speakers are the entertainment atmosphere.
For instance
, a renowned
movie
 was made with a budget of 1000 crores which was released in the
theater
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 as a 3d
movie
. I watched that
movie
in
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on
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 a
cell
phone
 I did not feel that involvement and
experience
 while watching it on the
phone
. In Your leisure
time
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 if you want to spend
a
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quality
time
 with your friends and family, you can get a different type of
experience
 in the
theater
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. If you're watching thriller movies with your friends that will be a memorable
experience
.
For instance
, my cousin's visited my village in
summer
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the summer
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 holidays, so they were getting bored so we just decided to go to a place where
horror
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a horror
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film
 was playing and everyone got frightened
with
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by
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 the spooky sounds and
frightened
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 scenes. My point is one can never
experience
 those kinds of
atmosphere
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atmospheres
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 if they are watching
in
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on
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 a
cell
phone
. In
conclusion
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 to get an unforgettable
experience
 go to a
movie
theater
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 and
to
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save
time
, you can use electronic devices to watch a
movie
 with some compromises. I feel the former is better than the latter.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Mobile Viewing
  • Cost-efficient
  • Time-efficient
  • Personalized experience
  • Immersive
  • Cinematic experience
  • Surround sound
  • Collective experience
  • Technical superiority
  • Sensory experience
  • Social hubs
  • Cultural events
  • Distractions
  • Preservation
  • Filmmaking art
  • Cinematographic nuances
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