Some people think that the best way to reduce the time spent in travelling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city center with apartment buildings for commuters, but others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In recent times, professional people's
time
wasted due to traffic congestion. It is considered
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many individuals that the finest approach to lessen
time
when
they
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commuting
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is to substitute
parks
and gardens close to the city
center
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centre
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with commuter
residence
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, whereas others reject
this
notion. In
this
essay, I will explain both sides of the perception and disagree with the idea which
is replace
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parks
with
residential
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area
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. To commence with, there are several
advantage
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to be shared why
parks
required
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are required
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to be replaced with apartments.
First
of all, professionals are engaged with various official
liability
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despite that they have to waste their
time
unwillingly
for
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traffic congestion.
As a result
, they need to decrease their regular commuting period by
relocate
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near
to
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the
center
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of
metropolis
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the metropolis
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.
For example
, commuters in Dhaka metropolis
they
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are wasting their
time
during
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standing for transport.
Therefore
, if their residence
close
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is close
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to the workplace,
then
transportation
expense
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as well as precious
time
that
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can be
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effective
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way.
On the contrary
, many individuals want to keep green
area
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such
as
parks
and gardens. The primary reason behind their remark is that nature conservation that
lead
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to
keep
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keeping
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environment
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free from pollution. Citizens who are living in
metropolis
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a metropolis
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they
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can pass leisure
time
in the park. Another point is that
instead
of replacing gardens authorities can construct
flyover
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flyovers
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or underground metro. Professionals can reduce travel
time
by using
those transportation
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.
For instance
, in Tokyo, working people
commuting
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through
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metro
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the metro
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which is
time
efficient for them. To conclude, traffic congestion is
common
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a common
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issue around big cities in that case replacement of greenery is not rational. In order to reduce
commuting
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the commuting
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period we need
new
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a new
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communication
medium
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like flyover or overpass.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • commuters
  • urban areas
  • housing availability
  • alleviating housing crises
  • public transport
  • traffic congestion
  • environmental health
  • biodiversity
  • recreational
  • mental health benefits
  • urban heat islands
  • green lungs
  • community interaction
  • cohesion
  • innovative urban planning
  • multi-use buildings
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