Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema other says to be fully enjoyed films need to be seen in a cinema.

Few people say that watching a
movie
on our
cell
phones is a better
experience
than going to a theatre while others believe to
understanding
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a
film
completely one has to go to a theatre. In my opinion, I agree with the
second
statement. In
this
,
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I'm going to explain both views. Convenience is one of the key benefits of seeing a motion picture on a
cell
phone
while coming to the cinema hall atmosphere plays a huge role in involving and enjoying the cinema. Some people who are working overtime do not have ample amount of
time
to book tickets to the
movie
and make a commute to the auditorium. So if they get some leisure
time
, they use
this
moment to watch a
film
in
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their mobile phones by sacrificing some of the amenities provided by the
film
theatre-like huge screens, and background noise. sound speakers are the entertainment atmosphere.
For instance
, a renowned
movie
was made with a budget of 1000 crores which was released in the theatre as a 3d
movie
. I watched that
movie
on a
cell
phone
I did not feel that involvement and
experience
while watching it on the
phone
. In Your leisure
time
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if you want to spend
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quality
occasion
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with your friends and family, you can get a different type of action in the
theater
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. If you're watching thriller movies with your friends that will be a memorable
experience
.
For instance
, my cousin's visited my village in the summer holidays, so they were getting bored so we just decided to go to a place where a horror
film
was playing and everyone got frightened by the spooky sounds and frightening scenes. My point is one can never
experience
those kinds of atmospheres if they are watching on a
cell
phone
. In
conclusion
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to get an unforgettable
experience
go
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to a
movie
theater
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and save
time
, you can use electronic devices to watch a picture with some compromises. I feel the former is better than the latter.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Mobile Viewing
  • Cost-efficient
  • Time-efficient
  • Personalized experience
  • Immersive
  • Cinematic experience
  • Surround sound
  • Collective experience
  • Technical superiority
  • Sensory experience
  • Social hubs
  • Cultural events
  • Distractions
  • Preservation
  • Filmmaking art
  • Cinematographic nuances
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