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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
In modern times, the issue of living foreign
country
 has become highly controversial. Some
people
 believe that they have to speak a foreign
language
 when living in other countries and they will face a lot of problems. I Partially agree with
this
 idea and in
this
 essay, I will give some arguments in favour to support my opinions. Generally speaking, there are a number of reasons. why do
people
 believe that speaking a foreign
language
 can lead to many Problems
.
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 The primary argument in support of
this
 idea a
person
 coming from another
country
 might not be speak and understand the
language
 which might be a
problem
 for a
person
 who is living in a
country
 and a
person
 who came to the
Country
. Another
problem
 is linked to the
language
 barrier, but it might influence the behaviour of others.
For example
, in some cultures like English
People
 Prefer to be very polite and say things differently from other cultures.
Therefore
 a
person
 who doesn't know how to behave in a particular
culture
 might offend others around him. The Practical
problem
 would be a misunderstanding of
culture
. That means that a
person
 who visits other countries does not understand other cultures and behaves as he wants to.
Secondly
, finding a job would be another big
Problem
.
For example
, if an individual works in a restaurant, the
people
 who live in a
country
 and
they
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were born in that
country
 might not respect and not like the behaviour of a
person
 who works in a restaurant, it might be because
of
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the
culture
 is different. In conclusion,
People
 have a tendency to live in a foreign
country
. I think
people
 should learn
a foreign languages
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a foreign language
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 and educate themselves in order to know how to behave in different situations with
different
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culture
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cultures
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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