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Some people think that history has nothing or little to tell us, but others think that studying the past history can help us better understanding the present discuss both views and give your opinion

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The 21st century has witnessed an unprecedented change in people's attitudes toward
history
.
This
 has created two schools of thought; on the one hand, ample arguments have been raised that it is futile to study
this
 subject.
On the other hand
, people object to
this
 notion.
This
 essay will elaborate on both sides of
this
 issue and provide a personal perspective. It is my contention that the
history
 that we are learning through textbook today lack accuracy and objectivity. In fact, as modern civilization dwellers, it is unfeasible for even historians to prove the story's veracity from ancient times, for we barely have any records or adequate physical artefacts.
In addition
, the finding of archaeologists might be futile as the signatures of the ancient civilization have been eroded.
Furthermore
, historians can only deduce the content of the scriptures, so they can not guarantee the probability of correctness, leading to the action that they have to patch the scattered pieces of information together. Another point is that
adult's
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 and children's education about
history
 today heavily indicates a subjective perception.
Moreover
, the reason that each nation only wants to tell the latter generation tales about their ancestor's glory and nurture a sense of patriotism will create a loss in objectivity since we can not get the whole picture.
Therefore
, it is understandable that people feel like
history
 knowledge is insignificant.
On the other hand
,
history
 is an essential part of one's ethnic-cultural identity.
Therefore
, by learning about the life of our ancestors, we can gain wisdom from our predecessors to avoid making the same mistakes.
Additionally
, we can preserve and flourish the long-gone tradition. An example to exemplify
this
 case is that in Vietnam,
history
 is one of the compulsory subjects of its vital role in formulating a sense of gratitude for the heroic deeds of the heroes who free our country from colony and slavery. It is irrefutable that learning about
history
 allows us to see a clearer view of the past. To conclude, the education of the past can not be excluded because it is the structure to build today's society, despite the fact that there is little correctness in the written records.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • insights
  • progression
  • values
  • beliefs
  • heritage
  • identity
  • applicable
  • biased
  • subjective
  • practical
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