Some people think that government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children. Do you agree or disagree?

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among younger demographics has become highly debatable. A lot of people claim that

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governments should take

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full responsibility for

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problem.

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opinion and explain and prove why

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environment and family structure, and not the government, ought to be held accountable for

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's weight-related problems. To start with, leading a healthy lifestyle and providing good

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choices for

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should be encouraged by any government.

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, it is ultimately an individual family and their choice of lifestyle that has a real influence on the

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of their

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, if caretakers do not encourage active exercise and healthy diets and allow spending unlimited time in front of TV and computer screens, they inevitably expose their

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to sedentary life and

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risk of gaining weight.

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, creating a home environment that models good

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and fitness practices can overcome the problem of

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.

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, it has been discovered that a structure of a family often affects childhood

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living with single mothers, according to the research, are more obese than the ones living with two parents. The explanations for

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include single-parent households having higher time demands due to the lack of shared responsibilities at home.

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, a reduction of homemade meals

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shared family meals, and physical activity can occur. And

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in its turn leads to

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developing unhealthy eating habits and making poor food choices, which

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to gaining weight.

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. There are,

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, legitimate reasons to expect any government to impose policies

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as national

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education, school-based

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programs, dietary guidelines,

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labelling, etc.

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regulations will inevitably result in decreasing the

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rates among

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population and increase the awareness of

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of healthy diets.

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, it is up to the family to closely adhere to these policies.

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, putting the entire responsibility only on

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would be unreasonable. In conclusion,

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essay argued that family lifestyles and structure are solely responsible for

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's adiposity. And I personally believe that the root cause of

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in

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is the place where in the end everything is decided: family.