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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always good.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #lives #change
With
time
,
change
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of
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individuals
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 to live like they are living now to avoid
change
.
However
, others believe that it is
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necessary
neccesary
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necessary
 to
change
. In my
opinion
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 pupils should
change
 to discover new things about
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themselves
thmselves
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themselves
. To start with, many don't like to
change
 themselves because they are used to the lifestyle. To explain, they are habitual
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 living and they are afraid of
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change
 because
they
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 things many might
change
 and they are too lazy to
change
. To add more, they are following
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 has been told to do.
On the other hand
, with the passage of
time
change
 need to happen in everyone's
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.
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lifestyle to needed to cope
up
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with the
time
.
In other words
, with the
change
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 they are learning many things about
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life so that they can be on
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par with others. Masses shouldn't think they are lacking in something. Technologies are upgrading so does the lifestyle.
For example
, a group of students from Stanford University reports that
,
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 they have seen 59%
people
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are
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changing from post covid.
As a result
, individuals should learn after a specific period of
time
 frame. To conclude, in my opinion,
change
 is
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neccessary
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necessary
 for upgrading themselves and
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 in today's world.
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