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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always good.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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 to live like they are living now to avoid
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, others believe that it is
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 pupils should
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 to discover new things about
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themselves
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. To start with, many don't like to
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 themselves because they are used to the lifestyle. To explain, they are habitual
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 living and they are afraid of
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 things many might
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 and they are too lazy to
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, with the passage of
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lifestyle to needed to cope
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with the
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 they are learning many things about
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life so that they can be on
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par with others. Masses shouldn't think they are lacking in something. Technologies are upgrading so does the lifestyle.
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, a group of students from Stanford University reports that
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 they have seen 59%
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changing from post covid.
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, individuals should learn after a specific period of
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 for upgrading themselves and
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 in today's world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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