Some people believe that it is better for children to grow up in the city, while others think small town life is more suitable. Discuss both sides

One of the most crucial roles of every parent is providing their
children
with fostering environment. Family psychologists could be distinguished into two distinct types regarding their opinion about whether raising kids in larger
cities
,
instead
of small
cities
or towns, would be more fruitful for
children
or not.
To begin
with, being raised in
cities
, while letting
children
have better access to advanced infrastructures like enriched education, could be detrimental to their mental health in some cases.
In other words
, in
cities
like Tehran, the capital of Iran, so well is the quality of most primary schools that
such
quality neither could be found in small towns, like Firoozkooh, a small town in Tehran province nor even in small
cities
like Shahriar, a small city in Great Tehran Metropolitan.
Nevertheless
, the level of stress that a Tehranian adolescent might be imposed , just from being trapped in a heavy traffic jam, gradually could lead to some implicit anxiety and other psychological disorders like depression.
On the other hand
, having less cultural diversity, small towns will prevent
children
to mix up with friends with a variety of ideologies, religions and social classes ,
however
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in
such
circumstances
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children
's identities, particularly those of adolescents, would form in a stronger manner. In fact, some research on z-generation youngsters, like Maryam et al work on Indian nationals, recently revealed that undergraduate students who were born or raised in a large city, are two times more likely than others, to embark on constructive dialogue with their classmates from different backgrounds and nationalities. To conclude, each decision has its advantageous and disadvantageous results for
children
, so parents should choose based on their constraints and priorities as well as the
children
's potential.
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  • community
  • cost of living
  • healthcare
  • educational facilities
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  • recreational activities
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