Some people think that television has destroyed communication among friends and family. In what extent do you agree or disagree

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among family and friends by watching
television
.
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my perspective, I strongly agree that
television
is one of the root causes of
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destroying relations.
However
,
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not only spoil
connection
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the connection
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but
also
our precious
time
.
To begin
with, I want to aver that
television
is
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cutting-edge technology along with one of
easiest
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and most primary entertainment
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in our busy
life
. But
according
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new statistical report, the proliferation of using
television
has been enhanced
then
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before.
However
, students are got addicted and spent
good
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amount of
time
on
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watching different
comedy
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, movies, and sports
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marks are going down. Meanwhile, adult people have
also
chosen
this
as an enjoyment purpose. Over-using something that could be harmful,
that
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replicates
on
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this
situation,
as a result
, the bonds between kit and kin are affected.
In addition
, it has
also
been keeping
greatly
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the greatly
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bad impact on work
life
and healthy
life
. To alleviate
this
problem, we should enhance the awareness of less use of
television
, and advise them to keep
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a connection
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to relatives and neighbours and do
the
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other outdoor or indoor things which will
makes
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life
far more batter
then
watching
television
in leisure
time
.
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student
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students
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can fully concentrate
in
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their studies
that
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is
the
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crucial part of their career, and they can do some outdoor activities which could develop their knowledge
instead
of
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attention to different programs. In conclusion, I really
belief
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that, though
television
has some benefits
but
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it should better choose outdoor and indoor activities on
time
off over that.
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