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Many people use written language in less formal and relaxed way. Does this development have advantages and disadvantages?

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Nowadays, a lot of
people
use
 written phrases in an informal and more relaxed way. I think
this
 development has not only disadvantages
,
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 but there are a lot of advantages too. I will explain my point of view in
this
 essay.
As a
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 fact, the younger generation sometimes
use
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 written
language
 all their life, but they don’t understand that they damage their
language
 with that.
However
, our
language
 is our history, and when
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children speak only with written
language
, they forget about common phrases and words
which
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 their grandparents and before them used.
Nevertheless
,
this
 type of communication has several advantages.
First
 of all,
people
 save
time
 when they
use
 that.
Secondly
, the person is used to written
language
 and
he
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feels comfortable using informal
language
.
Thirdly
, written
language
 creates a branch of new words which are popular
between
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 young
people
. What is more, my elder brother likes playing computer games and one of the main tasks is to give information in
time
 because the information can be useful for your victory. The player can save
time
 to say these short phrases and words. To conclude, I think that it is normal to
use
 written
language
 in our daily life, but
in
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this
time
people
 shouldn’t forget about the literary style of his
language
.
The
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language
 is so brilliant, it is the way of
our
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communication
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, and we should save them, to try to
use
 written
language
 in a less formal way.
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  • informality
  • digital communication
  • texting
  • social media
  • instant messaging
  • generational shifts
  • brevity
  • personal expression
  • language standards
  • erosion
  • interlocutors
  • emojis
  • internet slang
  • academic contexts
  • language learning
  • misunderstandings
  • language teaching
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