Many parents today organise extra classes for their children after school and at the weekends. Do you feel that this is a worthwhile thing to do or do you feel children have enough education at school?

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These days

schools

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are offering a lot more diverse activities to their

students

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, an increasing number of families enrol their children in

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extra curricular

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activities outside

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hours. I personally think that

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is the right decision as the knowledge obtained in modern

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and in

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opinion. To start with, educational institutions have been evolving for the past two decades striving to move away from the teaching philosophies of the previous century and mostly focusing on the development of the

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skills,

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as digital literacy and communication. Regardless

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benefits,

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has been happening at the expense of training

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in main subjects and helping them gain profound knowledge.

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, there is a substantial rise in the number of

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after-

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clubs or personal tutors, who provide a considerably better academic service than

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. Studies have revealed that foreign

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schools

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and Maths clubs have become ubiquitous in the past two decades. And

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trend concerns not only major academic subjects

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but

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Arts and Sports, which seem to be increasingly disregarded at

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, anyone who can afford it

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takes their children to Sports or Arts cubs to get trained

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to the extra lessons in main subjects. Another point to consider is that additional classes and tutors offer a lot more personalised attention and tailored study courses to

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than the teachers at

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where the class size is considerable, and

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students

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real needs and interests are overlooked. Having more attention from a teacher entails having

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personalised learning process and more feedback, which is conducive to successful learning.

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, extra lessons pay off and are highly beneficial for

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students

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, it would not be reasonable to completely lose trust in

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, as they still are the places where we get develop life skills and get educated.

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, it has to be admitted that the educational standards have been lowered in

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and they often fail to meet our expectations. In conclusion, due to the benefits that extra classes bring any parent who can afford

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should consider them for their children.

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Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

5.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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365 words

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academic and non-academic subjects
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grade improvement
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Many parents today organise extra classes for their children after school and at the weekends. Do you feel that this is a worthwhile thing to do or do you feel children have enough education at school?

Fully explain your ideas

An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors, and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What can be done to deal with this situation?

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Some people think that mobile phones should be banned in public places like libraries, shop and on public transport, others argue that people should be free to use their mobiles wherever they like.

Some people think we should keep all the money we earn and not pay taxes to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree?