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Many parents today organise extra classes for their children after school and at the weekends. Do you feel that this is a worthwhile thing to do or do you feel children have enough education at school?

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These days
schools
 are offering a lot more diverse activities to their
students
.
Nevertheless
, an increasing number of families enrol their children in
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extra curricular
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 activities outside
school
 hours. I personally think that
this
 is the right decision as the knowledge obtained in modern
schools
insufficient
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 and in
this
 essay, I will present arguments and examples supporting
this
 opinion. To start with, educational institutions have been evolving for the past two decades striving to move away from the teaching philosophies of the previous century and mostly focusing on the development of the
21st century
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 skills,
such
 as digital literacy and communication. Regardless
obvious
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 benefits,
this
 has been happening at the expense of training
students
 in main subjects and helping them gain profound knowledge.
As a result
, there is a substantial rise in the number of
er
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 after-
school
 clubs or personal tutors, who provide a considerably better academic service than
schools
. Studies have revealed that foreign
languages
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schools
 and Maths clubs have become ubiquitous in the past two decades. And
this
 trend concerns not only major academic subjects
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 but
also
 Arts and Sports, which seem to be increasingly disregarded at
school
.
As a result
, anyone who can afford it
,
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 takes their children to Sports or Arts cubs to get trained
in addition
 to the extra lessons in main subjects. Another point to consider is that additional classes and tutors offer a lot more personalised attention and tailored study courses to
students
 than the teachers at
schools
 where the class size is considerable, and
students
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 real needs and interests are overlooked. Having more attention from a teacher entails having
more
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 personalised learning process and more feedback, which is conducive to successful learning.
Thus
, extra lessons pay off and are highly beneficial for
school
students
.
Furthermore
, it would not be reasonable to completely lose trust in
schools
, as they still are the places where we get develop life skills and get educated.
However
, it has to be admitted that the educational standards have been lowered in
schools
 and they often fail to meet our expectations. In conclusion, due to the benefits that extra classes bring any parent who can afford
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 should consider them for their children.
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