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Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might the reason for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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A set of
people
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 devote a large part of their lives to spending in and around their born
town
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 due to various reasons described below.
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 of the reasons,
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 has
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 negative and positive impacts on each individual and the nation as a whole as elaborated below. As I believe the most common reason to live in the
places
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 where
people
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 are born is the ownership of the
properties
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 as houses and lands. Most of the residents get possession of the
properties
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 from their parents, so, if they want to move away from the
places
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 they were born they should buy
properties
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 and settle down.
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 process requires quite a lot of money , which most countrymen couldn't afford.
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, the responsibility of looking after the parents and attachments that
people
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 have with their relatives
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 play major roles in not moving away from where the
people
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 originated. There are
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 advantages and disadvantages to sticking to the born place. On the one hand, living in the original home
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 improves social security.
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, there will be no risk to the children as they grow up in and around their own relatives and the aged population will
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 have a secure life with their own children.
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,
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 children and elderly
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 will benefit and
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 will give social satisfaction to middle-aged
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.
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, on the other ,hand living in and around the born
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 will definitely increase the travelling costs as well as reduces the effective time that can be allocated to work and learning as most of the workplaces
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 and good schools are located in
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 areas , which are way from the brith
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.
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 will negatively impact the economy of the country.
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 why in the modern world most entrepreneurs encourage industrial villages consisting of all facilities
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 as schools, daycare centres and eldercare stations . To conclude,
people
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 tend to live nearby
places
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 to their hometowns as they have the ownership of
properties
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 inherited from their parents and
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 has
both
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 positive and negative impacts on the social and economical well-being of the country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Migration
  • Settlement
  • Hometown
  • Roots
  • Community
  • Emotional attachment
  • Sense of familiarity
  • Social network
  • Bond
  • Safety
  • Proximity
  • Support system
  • Heritage
  • Limited options
  • Risk aversion
  • Adaptability
  • Comfort zone
  • Unfamiliarity
  • Exploration
  • Adventurous spirit
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