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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of the most people's life. Others think that adult life brings more happiness in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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There is no doubt that staying happy in any age group is important for mental health.
Although
 some believe that most people are happy in their teenage years, others argue that despite high responsibilities adult
life
 brings more happiness. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides and show my support for the former. A person's childhood is the best phase of
life
.
Although
 you have to study and take exams, there isn't any burden of responsibility.
For instance
, when I was in high school, most of the time I used to read and play outdoors. Apart from that, I did not have to think about earnings or managing the budget for my family.
This
 is the age where you explore and create your own ideas. You do not have to worry about what others will think about you as you have your own perspective.
This
 is not the same with adult
life
 because there are family responsibilities which you have to handle.
Firstly
, you have to make sure that you earn enough to make your livelihood.
Secondly
, maintaining a work-
life
 balance without disturbing your own mental health.
Although
 you start to earn and have enough money to go on trips, time becomes a constraint. When we think we have taken care of everything, another tension comes in line. In conclusion, I would say that, despite the fact that in adult
life
 we have all the resources, the teenage years are special and full of happiness as we are carefree with no baggage.
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task achievement
To further strengthen your task response, you might include more specific examples and counterpoints. This helps to provide a comprehensive discussion of both views before forming a supported opinion.
coherence cohesion
While your introduction and conclusion are clear and present, you could improve coherence by using more transition phrases and connecting sentences to make the flow of ideas smoother. This helps in guiding the reader through your essay seamlessly.
task achievement
Your essay effectively presents both sides of the argument and clearly states your own opinion, which aids in meeting the task achievement criteria well.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear and logical structure throughout your essay with well-rounded paragraphs and a concluding section that restates your opinion in light of the points discussed.
task achievement
Your use of personal examples, such as your experience in high school, adds authenticity and relevancy to your discussion points. This is a strong point for supporting your main ideas.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • teenage years
  • happiest time
  • freedom to explore
  • discovering the world
  • strong friendships
  • relationships
  • sense of adventure
  • new experiences
  • adult life
  • greater responsibilities
  • a sense of fulfillment
  • career achievements
  • personal accomplishments
  • long-term relationships
  • financial independence
  • life choices
  • satisfaction
  • support
  • immense joy
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