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Nowadays people waste a lot of food that was bought from shop and restaurant.Why do you think people waste food? what can be done to reduce the amount they throw away?

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While some
people
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to get
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foods
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, some other
people
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 easy to gain and
also
 waste
their
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 foods that they bought from the store. In my point of view, it is a problem that needs to be solved by
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analyzing
analizing
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analysing
 its main reason.
This
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both
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reason
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reasons
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 and alternative
solution
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 for
this
 issue.
To begin
, in developed countries, I think the abundance of
food
 is real and common
,
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 because
people
 in these countries can buy anything that they want in several near restaurants easily.
Furthermore
, the growth of
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 makes
people
have
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more money to spend, especially
in
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 consumer expenditures which include
food
 and drink expenses.
Subsequently
, some individuals tend to buy
food
 more than their
necessity
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 and keep it for themselves in their refrigerator.
However
,
in
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the
next
 day, they usually prefer to eat some fresh
food
 rather than eat the
food
 that they stored in the refrigerator,
therefore
 their
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food
 will become waste.
Although
 it is their right to consume any dish,
people
 should aware that wasting
food
is
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an
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inappropriate
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unappropriate
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 manner, especially when there
are
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another
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 human
being
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 that
in
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 hunger
condition
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 in many other places. Government should make a policy that every
food-stores
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food stores
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 must remind their own customer to avoid overconsumption. The
reminder
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 can be conducted in the form of advertising,
social
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a social
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 campaign, or text on the billboards. To sum up, personally, I believe that
waste
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food
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of food
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 is mainly because
customers'
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 overconsumption, and it can be reduced if all of the
stakeholder
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such
 as authorities, restaurants,
food
company
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companies
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, and citizens have awareness
about
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 the issue. So,
people
 will only buy
food
 according to their
necessity
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 in the future.
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