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Some people believe that schoolchildren should be made to wear a uniform. Others feel that children should be free to choose their own clothes. Discuss both sides of the argument and say whether you agree with pupils wearing uniforms.

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3 out of 10 students who participate in extracurricular activities stated that they feel better in the long run when
children
 had
meals
 alone/were responsible for preparing their own
meals
, 6 out of 10 dishes lack the nutritional requirements needed when
children
 prepare their own
meals
, the
meals
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last
 three years it is common for young adults to leave their studies, find a non-challenging occupation and remain there
due to
 the ease and comfort it provides worker mobility and tourism are usually curtailed
due to
 existing cultural ties to the home country when cities provided free transportation, the budget increased by over 90% when cities introduce free transportation for a month, the number of vehicles on the roads dropped by 30% and there was a 15% improvement in air quality nurses in the UK earned just 15% above the minimum wage a study by the New York Child Learning Association found that
children
 who read from picture books were 50% less likely to get distracted than
children
 who played educational computer games after being interviewed by Yale psychologists, over 70% of young office workers admitted that they had spent long hours on computers in their middle and late childhood years
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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