Some people think that the individuals who make the most money are the most successful. Others believe that the most successful are those who contribute to society, such as scientists and teachers. Discuss both perspectives and give your opinion.

Defining success is a difficult task. According to some
people
, those who earn a lot of
money
are the most successful. Others,
however
, insist that those who make a difference
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society
through their invaluable contributions are more successful than the richest. In my opinion, both of them are successful in their own right. Rich
people
are undoubtedly successful. In fact, almost everyone wants to be rich. If wealth was not an indicator of success, few
people
would want to amass it. So, obviously,
money
is a measure of success. Rich
people
can enjoy every comfort and happiness that
money
can buy. Better still, they can
also
make a difference in
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society
if they want. Some of the richest
people
in the world today are
also
known for their philanthropy. By using their
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money
, they are improving millions of lives in the undeveloped world.
This
would not be possible if they were not rich.
On the other hand
,
scientists
and teachers
also
contribute to
the
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society
and in some
cases
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their
contribution
has a greater impact than the
contribution
of the wealthy. We owe all the progress that we have achieved so far to
scientists
. If they had not spent countless hours on research and experiments, we would still be living in caves hunting animals for food.
Likewise
, teachers make
invaluable
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contribution
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too. They mould the future generation and equip them with the skills and knowledge required to be successful
scientists
, doctors, engineers and entrepreneurs.
Hence
, their
contribution
cannot be ignored. In short, anyone who contributes to
the
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society
by improving the living conditions of the less privileged should be considered successful. Professionals like
scientists
, doctors and teachers are capable of doing
this
and so are rich
people
.
Hence
, in my opinion, all of them should be considered successful.
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