some people say that advetising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things . others people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it . discuss both the views and give your opinion?

Some individuals believe that
advertisements
change our mind to buy things,
meanwhile
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others
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it is nothing if we no longer concentrated on it. I would certainly disagree
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people
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to buy things by tempting them.
Firstly
, advertisement is a very crucial one in businesses and marketing.
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, without
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advertising
people
do not get aware
about
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the
product
, even though it was released by a big company like google, apple, etc.
As a result
, it will tempt
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people
to buy the
product
.
In addition
,
people
would definitely
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the
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control over financial management. In previous days we only see ads
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television but now we are seeing
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in
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computers and mobile phones.
Moreover
, these
advertisements
generated
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based on our interests and
it
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could be a possible threat
for
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our privacy. There are other
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of
people
, who usually do not get attracted to the
product
even if it popped up to them for thousand times.
On the other hand
, they may get frustrated
some time
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about seeing the
advertisements
repeatedly. To overcome
this
kind
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issues
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, adding
a
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functionality like closing or never
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again the advertisement would be highly helpful because if a person likes it, either he/she would definitely buy or just skip it. In conclusion, even though
advertisements
are the backbone
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marketing,
it
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should be limited. In my way of thinking, promotion of the
product
is necessary but just to make the
people
aware about it and not to tempt it.
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  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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