During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants. Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter, remind him when and where you met tell him what kind of job you are interested in say why you think you would be suitable for the job
Dear Sir
I hope
this
letter finds you in good health and the
best of spirits. I am Navneet, I hope you might remember a talkative short girl with Curly, whom you met approximately 2 years ago on the plane during a trip from Toronto to Vancouver. I vividly remember every word of our conversation as you taught me a lot just in 6 hours.
I am looking for a job as a food supervisor as I completed my studies 6 months ago and I was planning for the future. Ultimately, I decided to contact you if you have any vacancies available at your stores. I want to get a job that could help me get permanent residency in Canada.
I have worked as a shift manager at Tim Hortons for a year, but they are not ready to provide me with the documents for my permanent residency. I have all the required skills like working in a team coordinately, leadership, and meeting Change preposition
in the
sales
targets of the restaurant. I will be obliged if you espouse me.
I will be waiting for your response.
Yours sincerely,
Navneet Kaur.Correct article usage
the sales
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tone
Ensure to keep your tone professional yet personal; this creates an inviting atmosphere for the reader and establishes a meaningful connection.
detail
Consider elaborating more on how your skills and experiences specifically align with the needs of the restaurant chain. Providing concrete examples can strengthen your application.
accuracy
Remember to proofread your letter for minor inaccuracies. While few were found, maintaining utmost accuracy helps in presenting a polished letter.
task achievement
Your letter effectively reminds the businessman of your previous meeting and clearly states your current interest and qualifications for the job.
coherence and cohesion
You've done well in organizing your letter into clear paragraphs, each with a single idea that enhances coherence and cohesion.
tone
The polite and hopeful tone at the conclusion of your letter is well-received and appropriate for such correspondence.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite