During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants. Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter, remind him when and where you met tell him what kind of job you are interested in say why you think you would be suitable for the job
Dear Sir,
I hope
this
letter finds you in good health and in the best spirits. I am Navneet Kaur, we met during a plane journey from Toronto to Vancouver in June 2024. During trip
, you offered me your business card Add an article
the trip
due to
my keen interest in working at a restaurant. You were quite impressed with my business scores and future business planning.
I worked as an assistant server for 7 years in Oliver a very famous bar and grill which is located in Toronto, Ontario. I am looking for some opportunities for my growth thus
, I am curious to know if you have any jobs available for me in your restaurants that are in Ontario. I applied for the job of a manager in your store that is
located in North York but I didn’t receive any positive response yet.
I already have seven years' experience in dealing with customers therefore
, I have good leadership, coordination and language skills. Thus
, I think that I would be a suitable match for the position of assistant manager or manager that you have available.
I will be waiting for your response.
Yours sincerely,
Navneet Kaur.Submitted by ss6802125 on
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Try providing more specific details or examples about your experience and skills to strengthen your case.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea and elaborate more on each point to improve coherence.
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You have clearly mentioned when and where you met the businessman, providing a good context for the letter.
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The tone of the letter is professional and polite, making it suitable for the purpose and audience.
coherence and cohesion
The letter starts with a clear greeting and ends with a courteous closing, which adds a professional touch.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is logically structured, with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite