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The pie charts illustrate the various strategies for dealing with hazardous waste in three different states. Overall, it is completely noticeable from the pie charts that all the three societies have one particular method of disposal which is the most popular. Whilst recycling is highly adopted by Koreans, the people in
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 generally practise underground disposal, whereas the British almost rely upon the incineration program. Out of the five methods of dealing with dangerous waste, the incineration method is by far the most popular one in the
UK
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 and among the other listed state, with the percentage being 82% in the
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, more than two-fifths lesser than
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 figure in
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 and about three-quarters less in Korea. From the pie charts, the statistic for the underground approach is high in
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 as compared to the two other countries. More than half in
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 as opposed to 8% in the
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. Again, the recycling process is highly adopted by Koreans, with a proportion of 69% as opposed to an insignificant percentage in the
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. With regards to other methods
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 as dumping at the sea and chemical treatment,
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, with both methods recording 8%
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