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Some people say that Ebooks and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines to what extent do you agree or disagree.

#people #ebooks #technology #newspaper #magazines
Technology has been developing very fast and there is always a race between traditional and contemporary methods,
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 can be seen in the way we can acquire
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information.Even though
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some argue that online reading will erase
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offline reading forever , I
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some what
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 disagree with the given statement.
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E-books are easily accessible and available for a lot of people ,
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 those who are not well connected to Internet cannot get them,
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 old people and young kids fails to do so.one example to support my idea is,for younger kids it is not a great idea to make them study e-books,as
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 of those little ones get tired and it
effects there
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 it is always apt to read books before sleep,when we do so on gadgets
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 will elevate
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 anxiety levels and they become restless to sleep.
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,considering the price, the newspaper
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 best economical than most of the online purchased books .population of a country is mainly contributed by
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 man ,most of whose earnings was paid for
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their
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 children’s education and career.Commoners cannot fancy these
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 of technology things,so they don’t even consider these
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.
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for
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this
 point is, in rural areas
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people will only concentrate on local news,rather than international.
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contrast ,through
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 we acquire a lot of information irrespective of time and place,
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 is quite easy to access those data .we can go on for news from any end of the world
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 because
Internet
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 is widespread.popularity of
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 is growing very rapidly
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 antique methodology. In conclusion,
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 e-books and magazines are gaining
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peoples
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 attention more,these cannot replace the
feel
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 of studying information on paper.
Newspaper’s
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 are always economical and easy to share
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the item
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item
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,on the opposite they don’t even require any gadgets to access them.so,there is
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market
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 for
papers
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,
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in spite
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in spite
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 rise of new inventions.
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