It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives.. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

It is said that no
risk
no gain,
however
, often it
give
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us misfortune. Undoubtedly
this
is true that without taking any type of chance
this
is tough to achieve something special. I believe that in personal
life
it’s can be terrible but in terms of
of
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Corporate
life
people
should think twice before taking any type of
risk
.
Firstly
, in our daily
life
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we do several
of
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risky things and sometimes
this
could be
mendatory
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mandatory
.
For instance
, often mass
people
buy lottery and generally
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this
is
no
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not
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costly
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.
However
, when they buy a lot amount of lucky lottery it could be
more risky
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. In my perspective
which
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is not essential. In
this
type of
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invest
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all
of
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investor
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the investor
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loss
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their money
expect
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except
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a few
winner
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.
Secondly
, some
of
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gamblers
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the gamblers
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play
gamble
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which is
quite
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risky thing. They can
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lose
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loose
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lose
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their capital by playing
this
. Maximum time they
loose
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their
invest
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but they play again, which is not important. Some
People
say that
this
is one kind of addiction.
On the other hand
,
risk
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is not a curse for all sometimes
this
is
blessing
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a blessing
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. In corporate
life
sometimes
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risk-taking
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risk taking
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risk-taking
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is essential. Many of my friends and neighbours have changed their carrier by taking chance.
For example
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my best friend left his job
last
year, which was not comfortable for
his
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him
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. He was unemployed
one
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year.
This
month he
have
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gotten a great job at
a
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it
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company which is well paid and more comfortable for
his
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him
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. In
conclude
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,
although
it brings good luck sometimes
but
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I believe
people
should be
well known
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before taking
risky
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a risky
the risky
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step
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. If
people
know enough
then
the advantages could outweigh the disadvantages.
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  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
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