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Disadvantages and advantages of having only one child. Do the advatages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, lifestyle has dramatically changed and parents have
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child
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. In my opinion, the benefits of having
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child
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 outweigh the disadvantages.
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, the main advantage of being a low number of members of families is overpopulation which means if each family is born just
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 kid, the population is decreasing all over the world.
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, all problems which relate to the population
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 as air pollution and types of illnesses are decreasing.
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, kids can get full attention from their families.
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, families have much time to do some activities with their children.
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, going to a park, talking to their children, and giving a piece of good advice to their children.
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, being
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child
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 in a family is not good for a kid. because they feel lonely.
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, kids can improve your part of their personality which relate to having a brother or sister.
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, sharing something that you have with your siblings cause you will be not selfish in society.
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 they can learn from other kids who are your age. In conclusion, I conclude that
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child
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 in a family has more benefits overall.
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