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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree with this option?

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Nowadays there is a rise in
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 number of
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 who would prefer fast
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, rather than a healthy meal and due to that
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 have to face different diseases. It is really important to take under control that field and the most effective plan to reach
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 high prices on fast
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. I agree with that statement and, in my opinion, if the government accept that rule, it will save the lives of many
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 and may reduce disease development. In
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 of all, fast
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 is very cheap and it can afford by almost everyone in the world.
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 do not have to worry about buying
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 in supermarkets, where they can spend much more money. ,
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 it is easier to have a quick meal because you do not have to cook something by yourself.
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,
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 do not think about how dangerous fast
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 can be.
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, some years ago a group of scientists from the UK did an experiment, where a healthy man had eaten only at Mcdonald's three times a day for 1 month. At the end of ,that his weight rose from 70 kilos to 100 kilos! By the way, doctors examined his sugar level which had increased two times and he was in the
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 stage of diabetes!
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, sometimes
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 do not have a choice to eat healthily.
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, there are schools in the US, where children have only fast
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 for the whole day. That leads to an increase in
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 number of students with overweight, and have heart disease and diabetes. Usually, their meal is free and it is included in the school payment, but if a student wants to have a healthy lunch, he or she needs to pay extra, while it has to be vice versa. To conclude, the issues connected with unhealthy
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 still take
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 place in a significant number of countries. The responsibility of it lays down on the government due to they usually do not really care about
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’s health. Personally, I hope that extra taxes on fast
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 will decrease its demand and popularity and
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 could think about their health more.

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