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Some people believe that our personalities are predetermined as a result of our genes before we are born and there is nothing that can be done to alter our character traits. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The diagram illustrates how an Australian town collects
rainwater
 to process in order to use as drinking
water
. Overall,
rainwater
 collected from
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a house
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house
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 can be used for drinking after it has been processed by being filtered and
then
being
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treated with chemicals.
Initially
, the rain which falls on the rooftop is collected by the gutter and
then
 runs down the pipe at the side of the
house
 into the drain at the bottom. Each
house
 collects
rainwater
 in
this
 way and the
rainwater
 is
then
 passed along underground drains to the
water
. The
rainwater
 passes through the
water
 filter to remove any impurities. Once it has been filtered, it continues along the pipes to a storage tank. From
this
 point, the
water
 goes from storage to
the
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water
 treatment. At the stage of the process, the
water
 is treated with chemicals in order to make
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it
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if
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 fit
consumption
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. When the
water
 is ready for drinking, it travels along pipes that lead back into the
house
 in the town where people can use the
water
from
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 daily consumption.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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