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RESEARCH INDICATES THAT CHARACTERISTICS WE ARE BORN WITH HAVE MUCH MORE INFLUENCE ON OUR PERSONALITY AND DEVELOPMENT THAN ANY EXPERIENCES WE MAY HAVE IN OUR LIFE.

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It is often argued that talents in us have more
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 in improving character development than received experience during
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 life. In my point of view, skills that we are born with have much more impact in many spheres of life than
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 of existence.
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 with, innate characteristics are great tools to achieve
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goals. It makes the process of making something easier and more available.
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 having genius in case of singing abilities with a deep and attractive voice because of his genetics is more likely to become
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 in future.
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, characteristics have more opportunities to reach the aim and
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 successful.
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, skills from our genes have an effect
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 social life.
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 code is directly related to the ancestors, so parents` social
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 have an important role in
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a child’s
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 community interaction.
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, if a mother is friendly and sociable to others,
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the child
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 may be kind and communicative to peers. In summary, characteristics are significant in
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 sphere to make new relationships and its often cause due to ancestors’
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. To conclude, innate features have a remarkable impression
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improvement
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the improvement
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 of our personalities in case of reaching goals and being
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a socially
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 active person.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nature vs. nurture debate
  • genetic inheritance
  • personality traits
  • behavior patterns
  • heritability
  • twins studies
  • malleable characteristics
  • upbringing
  • environmental influences
  • critical periods
  • language acquisition
  • worldview
  • innate traits
  • personal experiences
  • psychological development
  • epigenetics
  • adaptive behaviors
  • cultural imprinting
  • temperament
  • social conditioning
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