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Some people believe that education is the key to tackling hunger worldwide while others feel that the answer is in food aid. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Few individuals accept that instruction is the key to handling starvation around the world whereas others feel that the reply is in nourishment help. I concur
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, it is a true fact. Only those countries with below-average levels of education will go hungry. You can see from the statistics that
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 is the continent of Africa. There is no school system there. As children, they are taught to do hard manual
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 helps them live. In fact, if you add a school system, I think they will make a living from that knowledge. On the one hand, if they have the knowledge, for some reason they can't find a job. If the state helps to find or get a job here,
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 people who live starving will be able to live well or at least earn money for food. There are a lot of students in Kazakhstan who have knowledge but can't get a job. In conclusion, my position is 50/50. I advise the world's corporations and governments to take every opportunity to reduce hunger.
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