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Your friend has a travel company and would like you to come and work with him. Write a letter replying to your friend's offer. In your letter: •explain what you know about your friend's company •choose whether you accept or decline the offer •give reasons for your choice

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I’m writing
this
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 letter to let you know about my decision about the proposal you sent.
Firstly
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, let me thank you for your offer, I was surprised and amazed when I received your email for the offer. I know that you are an intelligent businessman Your company is considered as an esteemed institute of our city.
However
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,
due to
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 several reasons, I can’t accept your proposal. The private cause is my passion. I’m truly passionate about real estate and already started working on it.
This
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 thought is inculcated into me by my family, and currently, I am
also
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 fascinated by it. I could have thought about your deal if you had asked me a year ago, but right now, I am working on a crucial and my own first project ever that I have been getting from a client. I hope you can understand it. Keep in touch. Your best friend, DK

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single idea per paragraph
Make sure each paragraph contains a single, clear idea to improve readability.
logical structure
To improve coherence, consider using more transitional words and phrases to link your ideas smoothly.
complete response
Add a brief introduction about your background in real estate to give more context for your decision.
suitable writing tone
Appropriate writing tone that fits the context of a friendly yet professional letter.
greeting and closing
Clear and polite greeting and closing, which are essential for maintaining a friendly tone.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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