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More and more fathers are taking a break from their careers so that they can stay home and take care of their children while their wives work. This is better for the family than having both parents work full time. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Many fathers give up their jobs in order to take care of their homes and families, but I don't agree that
this
 is the best choice they can make.
This
 situation might work for some families, but I believe it causes problems for many. A stay-at-home
father
 might end up feeling unhappy, the family could end up not having enough money, and
parents
 can still spend time with their
children
 without staying home all day. A
father
 who stays home all day could end up feeling very unhappy. If he gave up a job that he enjoyed,
then
 he
also
 gave up doing something that interested and challenged him.
In addition
, he gave up the opportunity to be with colleagues who shared his professional interests. In exchange for these things, he spends his days doing boring chores
such
 as mopping floors and feeding and dressing his
children
. When a
father
 gives up his career, he
also
 gives up his salary. His wife may continue working, but she may not earn as much money as her husband did.
In addition
, even if the wife earns a good salary, it is still only one salary. When a family goes from two salaries to one, they have to make many changes in their lifestyle that are not always convenient.
Children
 can still have the benefit of time with their
parents
 even when both
parents
 work. In the
first
 place,
children
 spend most of the day in school, unless they are very young.
In addition
,
parents
 can spend quality time with their
children
 in the evenings and on weekends. They can
also
 plan family vacations that give them the opportunity to have special experiences together. A stay-at-home
father
 may seem like a good idea, but families need to consider all sides of the issue, both emotional and financial, before making
such
 a big change in their lifestyle.
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