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Homework
 provided by
teachers
 and lecturers is a vital factor in developing
children
's essential skills.
However
, most people hold the view that
teachers
 should not give
homework
 to
children
 and while others believe that
homework
 is a crucial factor that plays a huge role in
children
’s education. I agree with the latter view of the argument and the reasons for
this
 will be elaborated on in the subsequent paragraphs will examples. To commence with, it is true that assessing
homework
 for
children
 daily will make
children
 exhausted in education because today most
teachers
 are putting a huge pressure on subject material taught in the
school
time
 period as a repercussion offsprings come home tired.
Thus
, providing extra assignments or thesis for
children
 will lead to serious consequences of
children
 not being able to socialize with family members or friends. As an example, 35% of
children
 refuse to go to
school
 and learn, and they tend to drop out of
school
 at an early age.
Thus
, youngsters should be given free
time
 to relax their minds after
school
.
On the other hand
, I believe that juveniles should be given
homework
 because today most schools are not teaching according to the given
time
 period and some
children
 are not paying attention in classrooms. As an example, if it is the
school
 sports day many
children
 from the classroom go for sports practice
thus
 they neglect their subject materials.
Teachers
 providing a number of
homework
 materials for
children
 will not only enhance their knowledge but will refresh their skills in what was taught in class. To conclude,
although
 there are negative effects of providing
children
homework
such
 as they do not have free
time
,
but
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engaging youngsters in
homework
 will allow them to enhance their skills in education and knowledge.
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