Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for a child having a larger number of toys?

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Some people buy
numerous
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number of
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toys for their boys and girls for playing
.
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While some people, including me, think it is
waste
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a waste
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of money. I think the drawbacks of it would outweigh any advantages. In
this
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article
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I will discuss the pros and
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cons
crons
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cons
of
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issue. On one hand, Buying
large
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a large
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number of toys make children
spoil
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,
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, If they always fulfil their need,
their
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will be too
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arrogant
arogant
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arrogant
and they may
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bully
bolly
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bully
their classmates and make, In my
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children must learn the ability
of working
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hard under pressure.
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, It is a waste of money, because they do not need all of those plastic objects to spend their time. In my opinion, it is can kill their
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creativity
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creativity
and make them stupid.
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