Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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A group of
people
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opine that economic
development
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is
important
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an important
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target
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of
government
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the government
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, while some think that discrete
of
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development
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are
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is
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equivocal important for a
country
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. I personally support the latter proposition and will present relevant points along with precise examples and
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my view.
first
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of all, economic
development
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is key
of
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to
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success, because without financial
development
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any
country
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do
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not reach
there
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target, and
do
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does
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not concentrate
other
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on other
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sectors,
moreover
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financial
development
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country
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invest
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money
there
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weak sectors. For
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example
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,
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quatar
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is
economical
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an economical
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development
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country
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, so that, they invest their money in which sector they are weak. like cultivation, sports etc.
secondly
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,
financial
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financially
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development
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country
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always
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is always
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independent. They can make their decision freely, which
help
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helps
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to concentrate
for
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on
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development
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the development
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every
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of every
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branches
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branch
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in
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of
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their land.
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,
African
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in African
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countries
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, Sudan is economically
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undeveloped
undevelopment
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undeveloped
,
as a result
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, they
depend
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helper
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country
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countries
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.
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, they do not take any decision to develop their
country
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.
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,together with economical
development
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morality is important
factors
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to develop any
country
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. when
people
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do not maintain or follow honesty, truthfulness and trust, they do not keep their economic
development
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stable position.
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, when
people
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do not trust you, they never deal with you
any
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in any
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agreement or without help or
trust
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people
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will not work together.
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, progress is difficult
of
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for
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any
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countries
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country
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.
Secondly
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, education is
the
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an
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important
factors
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factor
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to upgrade any
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countries
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country
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. Education
help
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to open eyes, which
contribute
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contributes
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to
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the reached
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reached
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reaching
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sustainable
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the sustainable
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position
of
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in
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any
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countries
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country
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.
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,
Japanese
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the Japanese
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are 100% educated, so
that
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apply
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they realize right or wrong,
as
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and as
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it result, they are well developed. In conclusion, it is obvious that every
sectors
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sector
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are needed to make
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a development
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development
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developing
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country
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. So I think that
today's
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in today's
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contest other types of progress are gained.
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