Some people think that students should play more team sports, such as football and volleyball, rather than individual sports, such as running and swimming. Do you agree or disagree?

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teamwork by playing outdoor activities like football and volleyball rather than

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critical thinking is by taking part in

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an opportunity for individuals to improve their thinking while playing a certain game.

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social media which can

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a significant number of opportunities that help especially students

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mental improvement. Taking PUBG MOBILE as an example which is one of the most popular and effective

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to improve teamwork has been played by over 1000000000 humans.

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for people who are willing to be healthy and fit since while humans are doing these

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activities they

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fit rather than

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which are especially aimed to improve mentality.

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humans who are physically strong and fit have mostly played individual

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rather than those who mainly take part in

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sports

. To conclude, having weighed everything mentioned

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that, it would be the best choice for students to

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since they help them to be more productive

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their studies.

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