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Writing Samples
Band 8.5

Your car insurance company has told you that they are going to increase the amount you have to pay in insurance for your car each month. You are not happy about this. Write a letter to your insurance company. In your letter explain * Why you are writing to them * Why you think the insurance should not be increased * What you want them to do

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you that I have received a letter from your company regarding my car
insurance
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 premium which is going to increase in the coming month. Let me explain why my
insurance
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 should not go up.
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, I have been using your company's
insurance
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 for the
last
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 5 years.
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, if you see my records, I never had an accident or any other claims on me. I totally understand that the prices rise over the few months but an increase in
insurance
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, almost 20% is too much for me. I would request you to decrease the amount as much as you can or else I will have to take the
insurance
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 from a different company as they are providing it at a cheaper price and with much better benefits. I would appreciate it if you consider my application as soon as possible. Thank you in advance. Yours faithfully, Venkatesh Ravichandran

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task response
The letter clearly states the purpose and reasons for disagreement with the insurance increase. However, elaborating further on why the increase is excessive in light of current market trends or personal experiences might strengthen the argument.
task response
Consider providing more specific examples or evidence to substantiate your claims, which might enhance the persuasiveness of the letter.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure smooth transitions between paragraphs to enhance the flow of ideas.
suitable writing tone
The letter maintains a formal tone throughout, which is appropriate and effective for the context of a complaint letter to a company.
coherence and cohesion
There is a clear structure to the letter with a beginning, middle, and end, facilitating easy understanding.
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