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Some people claim that newspaper is the best way to get latest information because it has more influence than other forms of media. to what extend do you agree or disagree?

#people #newspaper #information #influence #forms #media
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It is true that some
people
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newspaper
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 is the best
way
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 to collect
latest
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information
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 as it is more fruitful than other forms of media. Whereas, some
people
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has
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 different aspect about
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 idea. I personally believe that nowadays other platforms are more
influence
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 than
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newspaper
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 I will discuss some ideas supporting my ideas about
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that
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 I will present some aspects. On the one hand,
people
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 believe that other forms of media are more useful than
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 because to read
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newspaper
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 one should need proper
time
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 and place where he can sit and collect
information
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 but as
per
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 today’s fast
life
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 no one has enough
time
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 to read
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the newspaper
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newspaper
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newspapers
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. Everyone is in hurry to reach their respective places on
time
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example
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 an individual who travels daily by car will always prefer to utilise that
time
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 while
listening
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 the radio. On the other hand, many
people
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are agree
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 with
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 statement for many reasons but I believe that only
people
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 of old age might
be agree
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 with
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 statement. As in ancient
times
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 there were no other facilities to get daily news.
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Newspaper
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 was the only
way
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. As well as
people
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 from old times
has
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 not
enough
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 knowledge to operate new media resources
such
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 as Television, mobile phones, radio etc.
This
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 could be the reason they find
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newspaper
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the newspaper
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 is the best
way
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 to
way
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 to get
information
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. At
last
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,
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newspaper
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a newspaper
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 might be the best
way
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 to get
latest
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information
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 but
daily
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the daily
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 life schedule of
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today.’s generation should not be ignored.
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